Wednesday 31 May 2017

I am trying to make my writing more exciting for the reader by varying ny sentence beginnings and using descriptive language.


Rarotonga
Swish,as the air flies past my face calmly,pushes my hair back.(Ratta Ratta) One of the  fresh rough coconuts falls from the tropical trees.Rough ground,as hard as math questions,My face is starting to  sizzle, like butter on a fresh  Hot pancakes.Waves having races to they reach the top the  flaky soft  sand.Water getting pushed back as the people paddle on kayaks.Angelfish twirling around like little ballerinas.

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