I am trying to make my writing more exciting for the reader by varying ny sentence beginnings and using descriptive language.

Rarotonga

Swish,as the air flies past my face calmly,pushes my hair back.(Ratta Ratta) One of the  fresh rough coconuts falls from the tropical trees.Rough ground,as hard as math questions,My face is starting to  sizzle, like butter on a fresh  Hot pancakes.Waves having races to they reach the top the  flaky soft  sand.Water getting pushed back as the people paddle on kayaks.Angelfish twirling around like little ballerinas.

 

I am trying to make my writing more exciting for the reader by varying ny sentence beginnings and using descriptive language.

100 word story-THE STARVING CROCODILE

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THE STARVING CROCODILE

Viciously I paddle down the orange thick gooey swamp,my hands lose grip of the paddle.Slowly I turn to my right my heart Collapse,I can not belive what I am seeing

Within this swamp an extremely wide,starving crocodile do I move? Do I stay here and let it stear me down?.Really slow I grip the paddle and slowly paddle away,the massive crocodile carefully sinks down back into the thick water like a sinking submarine.I can finally breath uhh (slowly sigh).